A Shield for Diana

Jack and Diana are an average couple. That all changes when they get invited to test a new Virtual Reality game. Two different playing style's. Follow along as there journey begins. Will they work together or tear each other apart. Welcome to United Online.

My Opinion: I want to love this work so much. There is so much story potential here. The author has the unique idea to tell the story of a married couple entering a full immersion game world together and experiencing the joys and sorrows of adventuring together there.

Unfortunately, despite the great potential, the bad spelling and grammar are huge detractors. On almost every page there are missing punctuations, misspelled words, missing quotations, and paragraph structure issues. These issues are a huge distraction from what might otherwise be a good beginning story in a new LitRPG series. I would love to read a more polished version of this story and see what the author can do with it as an ongoing series.

Score: 4 out of 10

A Shield for Diana